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As aeons chart the birth and death of stars
Our lives are numbered minutes, hours and days;
The end of time seems far too far away
To try to stretch a mortal love like ours.
To seize the infinite’s not in my powers;
An epoch’s longer than we can delay
Our lives’, our love’s inexorable decay;
As temporal as flowers in a vase.
But if we grasp each moment that we get -
Each cigarette, each kiss, each coffee cup,
Each friendly fight about the washing up,
Each smile, each fleeting bliss - then we may yet
Create a universe within each breath,
Immortalised each second; cheating Death.
A sonnet. A bit Donne-ish, a bit Marvell-ish, a bit me own. Continuing the conceit of Space which seems to more than occasionally come unbidden to me. I like the extra little internal rhymes and words which echo the sound of the end-rhymes. They feel like a good bit of extra stability - like visible beams in an old house.
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Parsat Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2015   Writer
Nice example of a Bowlesian sonnet.
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CatFaceBunyyAwesome Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Hobbyist
I like the vovla here, the poem brightens instantly when you contrast between the human experience and the vastness of space. It's a nice effect.
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cemetery-roses Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
the rhyme scheme isn't typical of a sonnet but your iambic parameter is correct... very pretty
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A-nomie Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Student General Artist
I believe it was a Italian sonnet because it has an abbacddc.... pattern so it is a typical rhyme scheme.
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InsistUpon Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011
I randomly searched sonnets because I have to write one for an English assignment...
Never thought I'd find something like this.
Sheer amazingness, my friend.
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sabrinamedwinter Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010
wow......awesome dude
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Penessence Featured By Owner May 4, 2009
Excellent
well worth a watch
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101 Featured By Owner May 26, 2009   Writer
Much obliged. Ta.
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citrusgirrl Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2008
absolute genius! xx
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101 Featured By Owner May 26, 2009   Writer
Much obliged. Ta.
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glastonburied Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
you say it straight, no dithering or concealing. i like that. but mostly i like the washing up tiff..those little moments live right there, rather than some conjured idea of how it should be
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Unsapient Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2007
Economic and clever without getting too heady, and the movement through to the conclusion is though not in its versical structure, but in its logical progression, very Shakespearian. Damn, it's nice to breathe some clean poetic air around here, it's tough to sniff out with all the sloppy wet farts crowding the field.
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evergrateful Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2007   Writer
You were born in the wrong century, like Chris Isaak was born in the wrong decade.

Despite its appearance, I mean that as a high compliment.
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mare-wrath Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2007
wow, and that last line is so epic, yet fresh and.... just perfect. I love this poem, though cliche by subject it's beautifully original.
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sarahmm Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2007
Well done, I do like this. It sort of reflects my current situation... lol.. Well, sort of last weeks current situation, funny how fast things change, isn't it?
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101 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2007   Writer
Thank you. Very gratifying to hear that others can find something to relate to in my scribblings.
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sarahmm Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2007
No problem!
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TheFavoritesProject Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2007
Your poem has been featured! [link]
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renaissance1912 Featured By Owner May 14, 2007
Holy crap, you are amazing. You have made the traditional new.
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Shmals Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2007   Writer
fine work indeed
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eleical Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2006   Writer
Beautiful! Very skillfully done.
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batousaijin Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2006
beautiful. i'm a huge fan of Donne myself.
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Boadecea Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2005
Lovely sonnet - your rhymes and meter are flawless.
I'm just trying to figure out what your rhyme-scheme is - I don't think it's typical of a sonnet.
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amengualone Featured By Owner May 16, 2006
it's 3 quatrains (abba,cddc,effe) followed by a couplet.

she's taken some liberties in the use of offrhymes
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101 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2007   Writer
Flattered that you've taken me for a "she", I guess... :)
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raguel Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2004
inexorable...

comme toujours, mon brave.

*sighs and imagines reading Donne by moonlight in the forest*

(P.S I know my eyesight is too poor to read any thing by moonlight, but I was being poetic. The cigarette and coffee cup line is beautiful.)
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101 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2004   Writer
T'ank-oo. Much appreciated.
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marzgfx Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2004
dunno if i got this worng... but it sounds liek your really appreciating the other half taht is 101... perhaps i shouldn't be such an arse in lessons... ive read over this a coupel of times to take it in... i get the feeling its troubled... perhaps a rocky stage in the path taht is love... anyway im probably bablin...

'Our lives’, our love’s inexorable decay;
As temporal as flowers in a vase.' - favourite line

keep it up
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tappydog Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2004
Read it.Loved it.

Ali
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